English - annotated exemplars level 2 AS91106

Form developed personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence (2.9)

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This annotated exemplar is intended for teacher use only. The student work shown does not always represent a complete sample of what is required. Selected extracts are used, focused on the grade boundaries, in order to assist assessors to make judgements at the national standard.

Low Excellence

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Student 1 (PDF, 1.6MB)

For Excellence, the student needs to form developed, perceptive personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence.

This involves demonstrating understandings and expressing viewpoints that are insightful and/or original. This includes responding to links between text and self, and text and world.

This student has independently selected and read the biography Solo by Vicki McAuley as one of the six texts required (Explanatory Note 4). The student forms a developed personal response, supported by specific details from Solo, by giving a reasoned and clear viewpoint about a person's behaviour, supported with evidence (1).

There is an insightful understanding and viewpoint about the author's purpose, supported with evidence (2) and a clear and relevant link between the viewpoints about Andrew's behaviour and the author's purpose, supported with evidence (3).

For a more secure Excellence, the student could develop the understanding about the tensions between individual fulfilment and social responsibility.

High Merit

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Student 2 (PDF, 1.2MB)

For Merit, the student needs to form developed, convincing personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence.

This involves demonstrating significant understandings and expressing viewpoints that are reasoned, clear and relevant. This includes response to links between text and self, and text and world.

This student has independently selected and read the New Zealand Listener article The Princess Industrial Complex by Jane Clifton as one of the six texts required (Explanatory Note 4). The student forms a developed personal response, supported by specific details from The Princess Industrial Complex, by giving clear and relevant viewpoints about research on the influence of targeted marketing, supported by integrated evidence (1).

The personal response demonstrates significant understandings that begin to show insight (2) and there is clear response to the link between text and self that is relevant to the viewpoints (3).

To reach Excellence, the student could further develop the viewpoint about the difference between the American and New Zealand contexts that are shown by the research.

Low Merit

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Student 3 (PDF, 1.3MB)

For Merit, the student needs to form developed, convincing personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence.

This involves demonstrating significant understandings and expressing viewpoints that are reasoned, clear and relevant. This includes response to links between text and self, and text and world.

This student has independently selected and watched the film 2001: A Space Odyssey by Stanley Kubrick as one of the six texts required (Explanatory Note 4). The student forms a developed personal response, supported by specific details from 2001: A Space Odyssey,by giving a generally reasoned and clear viewpoint of the dangers of technology, supported by integrated evidence (1).

There is a link made between the text and the world that supports the viewpoint about the dangers of technology (2).

For a more secure Merit, the student could more clearly develop the response to the contrast between behaviours of HAL and the other, human characters in the film.

High Achieved

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Student 4 (PDF, 1.2MB)

For Achieved, the student needs to form developed personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence.

This involves demonstrating understandings of, engagement with, and/or expressing viewpoints on texts. This includes response to links between text and self, and text and world.

This student has independently selected and watched the film The Pursuit of Happyness by Gabriele Muccino as one of the six texts required (Explanatory Note 4). The student forms a developed personal response, supported by specific details from The Pursuit of Happyness by showing engagement through a sympathetic viewpoint towards the character’s situation and attitude, supported by relevant evidence (1).

The personal response begins to demonstrate significant understandings through the link between text and self (2).

To reach Merit, the student could develop significant understandings of how Gardner’s concern for his son’s well-being links to his desire to succeed.

Low Achieved

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Student 5 (PDF, 1.1MB)

For Achieved, the student needs to form developed personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence.

This involves demonstrating understandings of, engagement with, and/or expressing viewpoints on texts. This includes response to links between text and self, and text and world.

This student has independently selected and watched the film The Pursuit of Happyness by Gabriele Muccino as one of the six texts required. The student forms a developed personal response, supported by specific details from The Pursuit of Happyness,by demonstrating and developing some engagement through an understanding of Chris Gardner’s circumstances, supported by relevant evidence (1).

The response begins to make a link between the real world example of someone who faces challenges, and how most people and Chris’s wife respond to such challenges (2).

For a more secure Achieved, the student could develop the idea expressed about how much strength is needed to maintain hope in such a situation (3).

High Not Achieved

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Student 6 (PDF, 897KB)

For Achieved, the student needs to form developed personal responses to independently read texts, supported by evidence.

This involves demonstrating understandings of, engagement with, and/or expressing viewpoints on texts. This includes response to links between text and self, and text and world.

This student has independently selected and read the song lyrics for Dreaming by Scribe as one of the six texts required. The student forms a personal response that begins to demonstrate an engagement with the text. This is done by listing some reasons for admiring Scribe (1) and making a link between text and self (2).

To reach Achieved, the student needs to develop the personal response by expanding on ideas about willpower, determination and sacrifice.

 
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